During our discussions we came up with two different ideas that we will try out then see which one works more effectively. One idea is to have a voice over which is coming from the boys mind. He would be telling us about the situation and how he feels about it not giving too much away about the story line. Our second idea is to do a radio report that is being heard by the boy through ear phones, telling us about an accident involving a girl being shot. The boy looking already sad, then suddenly turning the report off would give an indication that he could have been affected by it.
Idea 1: voice over.
We will have the man walking across the trainstation platform, holding a back pack, dressed in quite scruffy clothing, looking down and upset. We will have the voice over playing whilst he’s looking up at train times, and carrying on as he walks into the waiting room.
“i dont know how they expect me to deal with it all. How can someone just come along and end some ones life just like that. No blame, no reason, i cant just let it go. They dont deserve to get away with it. How is prision a good enough punishment? Its not. They dont even deserve to live.”
Idea 2: radio report.
Before the actual news report starts, we’re goin to play random, second long clips of different “news reports” all of similar context.
“In Other News, the tragic death of a young girl from Yorkshire has been found out to be the work of Billy O’donell, a thirty-two year old man from West Sussex. The girl was shot several times in a drive by shooting and died at the scene. The murder weapon was found in his one-bedroom flat on Stope Lane last night. He will appear in London Magistrates Court later on today.
We had a conversation with Mr Barratt about our final idea and came across some problems with our voice over idea. We initially thought of having the man doing a voice over of his thoughts, then we thought of the idea of a news reporter doing the voice over as if the man is listening to the news, but then we encountered the problem of how we coud do that. We came up with the idea of making a fake radio news report on Garage Band and have the character listening to an ipod. We will try them both and choose which one works better.
Here is our storyboard which we made in order to plan out our idea.
After we changed our initial idea we decided that a thriller would be an effective and interesting piece to film. We researched some sucessful thriller films then decided to incorporate some of the ingredients that made them so good, for example a voiceover.
Our basic idea starts off with an establishing shot of a passing train, bus or car (we haven’t fully decided which one yet) then the next shot is a medium one of a boy/girl sat on a train on their own, leaning against the window next to them looking depressed. The non-diegetic music is solemn and clearly the mood is straight away emotional. We want to incorporate a voiceover during this part. We decided we should either have a newsreader speaking about the tragedy or the girl/boys voice giving hints as to why he’s so upset. We see a tear roll down the boy/girls face as titles start to fade on and off the bottom of the screen. We see a newspaper on the table (something we will have to make ourselves) hinting at what the film is about. The camera zooms in slowly to reveal the boy/girls emotions to a greater extent. The next thing we see is a medium shot of a flashback to when them and their partner were happy together, they’re messing about on the sofa enjoying each others company. The camera then sharply cuts back to the boy/girl sat on the train but this time the camera is viewing them from the side and is an extreme close up of his face in order to make the idea of tears more prominent. Then the camera cuts sharply to a long shot of another flashback where the couple are walking home from a party, tipsy and merry when a speedy car approaches. Dramatic non-diegetic music begins to play and then the camera cuts to a close up of both their horrified faces. The screen then goes black and we hear a gunshot. The audience then automatically presume that some tragic has happened. The camera then cuts back to the boy/girl sat on the train and the view pans down to where we can see them feel for the gun that’s in their pocket. Our opening will end here.